Her mocking laugh echoed about the room
her cold eyes fixed on the Bride and Groom
Every head there turned to see the cause
the Bride turned too, eyes hardened like claws
The laughter stopped, the figure turned away
the Bride sighed in victory, this was her day
but the Bridegroom’s face clouded with grief
the Bride, not seeing, felt overwhelming relief
Two lives joined as one, two vows were spoken
leaving one life shattered.,.. she walked away, heartbroken.
LadyP © 2011
Triangles…circles…spirales…I will be forever fascinated with the concepts…and I see, so are you, my friend…Love, c.
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true, cat, always fascinated by the emotive response to circumstances and settings…triangles, circles without end, spiraling away into the distance..Thank you for your comment my friend..xx
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Wow. Pen, you know what you could do with this? You could write an entire novella! In poetry fashion of course! This was wonderful…..and I have to say, that eye with the broken heart — outstanding!
XOXOXO
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I am so glad you enjoyed it Jenny, that is enjoyed the poem rather than the circumstances therein…It was an idea which just came from ‘a mocking laugh echoed’ and things went on from there…and the ‘eye’ I found trawling through Photobucket for simply ages, sigh!! I do work for my art!! 😉 ….xx
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Brilliant. 🙂
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thank you Robin, Glad you liked it…xx
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Wow, Pen, love this. The bride’s eyes hard like claws — yikes. I wonder about this marriage. Your work paid off handsomely – great picture, too.
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Glad you liked it Monica, I wondered about this marriage too, I know they just sprang from my imagination, but I feel I almost know ‘them’ …a very strange feeling too…nameless, not blameless and definitely not shameless I think… 😉
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Hi Pen, I prefer the groom’s grief to the bride’s hardness. We have a marriage coming up in the family this fall, and I hope all hardness will be banished! P.S. I saw your comment on Bluebee’s site – you know I love your comments. As for maintaining your privacy, we would have to look for Bess.
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well, Monica, I’ve sworn Bess to secrecy, she’s to answer to another name!! Mind you, she’s never revealed the name she chose, so she just ignores me now when I call her!! 😉 …. Hope the family wedding goes ok, and banish the above scenario from your mind…couldn’t happen!! (or could it!! lol!! ) … xx
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Triangular Emotions…..beautifully written, Lady P. Always a conflict, always a doubt, who knows if it’ll ever work out.
However, …….
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however….(I love the ‘hanging’ in the air wonder!!’) ….however!
Thanks Dan, for the compliment, and yes, the triangle of conflict, so easy to conjure out of thin air (or my brain to be precise 😉 !!)
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So sad, but these things happen…
Love and hugs!
Prenin.
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Yup, indeed, Sir Prenin, sad but a fact of life…the ties that bind…xx
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WOW!! Pen this one is awesome!
xoxo
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That’s a wonderful compliment Beth, my thanks to you…Glad you enjoyed it, a sad subject but compelling all the same I think. x
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I’ve seen this one happen so many times, someone always ends up heartbroken
Loved the Poem Lady P
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Where you give love there’s a risk involved, Lady Jude, but always a risk worth taking. We seek for perfection I suppose, and we’re human when all said and done.., Glad you enjoyed my imagined scenario…It just grew from a simple phrase, and it’s almost as if I know the ‘players’ involved and their story…which feels very weird…xx
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Sad Pen beautifully written Thank you xSheilax
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My thanks to you Sheila, glad you enjoyed the poem…’tis a trip into my subconscious I suppose, I wonder what else in hiding in there? 😉
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Hi Pen!!! 🙂
Yes, Elton is much maligned and yet made millions from his music, so SOMEBODY must have liked it! LoL!!!
I think you are thinking of Phil Collins, another of my favourites!!!
I agree about the music manufacturing machine, it pumps out a load of dross in the hope of catching the latest ‘sound’ only for the so-called band ending up in the trash as the next one comes along!!!
Elton John, Phil Collins, Iron Maiden, Queen – these are the people who will last!!!
God Bless – and the Bucks Fizz was Vereee nice!!! LoL!!!
Prenin.
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of course. Phil ,the drummer, Collins…thanks Sir Prenin, and cheers again, I bet that Bucks Fizz was wonderful…and I agree about Queen, Freddie was a one off…xx
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Awww, that’s so sad Pen, |I hope she finds her own true love. I wonder what his dark secret was?
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Maybe we will never know Arlene, ‘cos I love my poems for a bit then leave ’em ….so not many are continued or ‘fleshed’ out…Mayhap one day I will for this one…you never know!! xx
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Hi Lady P! I have a 2zpoint face book and I am inviting my favorites and my favorite’s favorite authors, artist, and interesting characters to come. There are many different types of authors but I believe them to be awesome people to know and I would like you to come too. On this site I tell everyone to post as they will their works, links, and words and in doing so the coolest people I’ve met can get to know each other and link up! I would be honored if you would send a friend request to: http://www.facebook.com/#!/2zpoint
Peace be with you!
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Thank you so much for the invite, Stuart, but I have just a limited amount of spare time and it’s usually taken up with my Blogger and WordPress sites, that I’ve never considered opening a Facebook page. (Bess would kill me too, she’s always sitting by the PC with a stop watch!! 😉 ) … Good luck with your endeavours , sounds like a great way to link up with like minded people…xPenx
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I see Bess with the stopwatch. Geez, what is so darn interesting about that piece of plastic? Can’t even chew it – or maybe…
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maybe’s just about right, Monica, anything small and plastic and she’d be trying to um…how shall I put it 😉 find out how it works.?. insomuch as I’d find a trail of bite size pieces scattered…x
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So tragic, it always feels so bad to see someone you once loved with another. I can only imagine how painful it must have been. Yet there is always hope, and I’m sure she’ll find a better man someday, and will be his bride 🙂
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hi there dp, I see you’re already piecing together a follow on scenario for my characters in this drama of broken love and romance…I’m sure she will too.
Thank you for your comment, much appreciated …xx
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All I can say is that these words break my heart as is the scenario they paint
Ian
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A sad story told in rhyme, Ian, I feel such a compliment in your response, my ‘players’ came from deep down inside my imagination , and perhaps drawing on life through something read or seen… Take heart in the thought that once heartbroken, healing comes and maybe a love found…who knows what happens next?.. xx
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This is a wonderful story in a poem, albeit sad. Love your work girlfriend 😉 xx
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